@@ -16,10 +16,9 @@

     <list>

       <item>

         <p>

-          Your internet activity, including the names and addresses of

-          the websites you visit, will be hidden from your Internet

-          service provider and from anyone watching your connection

-          locally.

+	  Your internet service provider, and anyone watching your connection

+	  locally, will not be able to track your internet activity, including

+	  the names and addresses of the websites you visit.

         </p>

       </item>

       <item>

@@ -43,7 +42,7 @@

       is exited or a <link xref='managing-identities#new-identity'>New

       Identity</link> is requested).

     </p>

-    

+

     <!-- XXX: ask Tor Browser team/mikeperry about things that are worth

     adding here. -->

@@ -60,9 +59,9 @@

     <media type="image" width="600" src="media/how-tor-works.png" />

     <p>

       The image above illustrates a user browsing to different websites

-      over Tor. The green monitors represent relays in the Tor network,

-      while the three keys represent the layers of encryption between the

-      user and each relay.

+      over Tor. The green middle computers represent relays in the Tor

+      network, while the three keys represent the layers of encryption

+      between the user and each relay.

     </p>

   </section>

 </page>