Clean up some phrasing based on feedback
Colin Childs commited on 2016-10-18 06:10:34
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- C/about-tor-browser.page 97e960a..b0b551b
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- Your internet activity, including the names and addresses of |
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- the websites you visit, will be hidden from your Internet |
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- service provider and from anyone watching your connection |
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- locally. |
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+ Your internet service provider, and anyone watching your connection |
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+ locally, will not be able to track your internet activity, including |
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+ the names and addresses of the websites you visit. |
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<media type="image" width="600" src="media/how-tor-works.png" /> |
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<p> |
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The image above illustrates a user browsing to different websites |
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- over Tor. The green monitors represent relays in the Tor network, |
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- while the three keys represent the layers of encryption between the |
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- user and each relay. |
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+ over Tor. The green middle computers represent relays in the Tor |
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+ network, while the three keys represent the layers of encryption |
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+ between the user and each relay. |
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</p> |
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</section> |
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</page> |
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