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 people's personal data while they're online. Because the vast majority

 of Internet traffic passes along public routes, it is relatively easy

 for prying eyes to view the comings and goings of Internet users -- and

-even gather some important financial or personal information. These

+even link some important financial or personal information to you. These

 snoopers can get their information almost anywhere. Like your Internet

 service provider. Or your favorite website, which may be disclosing your

 shopping patterns. Or maybe a politically rigid government is compiling

@@ -28,9 +28,9 @@ for others, it could jeopardize their personal security.</p>

 software that helps provide anonymity for Internet users. It works by

 allowing users to travel the web on a circuitous route on a set of

 servers positioned around the world.  When you use Tor, your route on

-the Internet appears haphazard, so snoops have a difficult time

+the Internet is indirect, so snoops have a difficult time

 following your path and seizing vital information. Tor also has special

-functionality, called hidden services, that allows users to publish to

+functionality, called hidden services, that allows users to run

 websites without revealing their location.</p>

 <p>Tor is compatible with different operating systems, such as Microsoft

@@ -38,10 +38,10 @@ Windows, Apple Mac, and various versions of Linux. Tor works with most

 programs that connect your computer to the Internet.</p>

 <p>Today, Tor is used by hundreds of thousands of people to protect their

-activities online. This could be journalists or human rights workers in

+activities online. These include journalists and human rights workers in

 politically rigid countries communicating with whistle blowers and

 dissidents. Law enforcement officers on Internet sting operations stay

-anonymous with Tor. As do people wanting to post socially sensitive

+anonymous with Tor, as do people wanting to post socially sensitive

 information in chat rooms, like rape or abuse survivors and those with

 illnesses. The Tor Network also provides protection for people looking

 for another layer of privacy from the millions of websites bent on

@@ -53,14 +53,15 @@ collecting private information and tracking their moves online.</p>

 volunteers. To help keep Tor's worldwide server network running and its

 open source software up-to-date, the Tor project is looking for new

 sponsors and funding.  Join organizations like Google, Bell Security

-Solutions, Cyber Threat-Analytics, the National Science Foundation, the

+Solutions, SRI International, the National Science Foundation, the

 NLnet Foundation from the Netherlands, Human Rights Watch, and more than

 500 individuals who have donated funds to the Tor Project.</p>

 <p>We guarantee your money will be put to good use. For every dollar

 donated to the Tor Project, 75 cents goes directly into development. We

 also promise good service. Sponsors receive personal attention, better

-support and the chance to influence the direction of Tor.</p>

+support, and the chance to help us choose which of our priorities we

+should focus on next.</p>

 <p>The Tor Project is a registered 501(c)(3) non-profit, making donations

 tax deductible for those living in the United States or those paying