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Nick Mathewson commited on 2004-12-21 20:37:10
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- contribute.html 840d83d24..9edc4c3da
- download.html 52b3f065c..d71de43f8
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<p>Users: |
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-<li>Try Tor out, and let us know about bugs you find or features you |
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+<li>Try Tor out, and let the Tor developers know about bugs you find or |
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+features you |
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don't find.</li> |
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<li>Please consider <a |
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href="cvs/tor/doc/tor-doc.html#server">running a |
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-server</a> to help us with development and scalability.</li> |
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+server</a> to help with development and scalability.</li> |
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<li>Does somebody want to help maintain this website, or help with |
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documentation, or help with managing our TODO and handling bug reports?</li> |
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<li>Please fix up <a |
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@@ -102,8 +103,8 @@ Frontier Foundation</a>. More EFF donations means more Tor development.</li> |
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</ul> |
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</p> |
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-<a href="mailto:tor-volunteer@freehaven.net">Let us know</a> if you want |
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-to help out! |
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+<a href="mailto:tor-volunteer@freehaven.net">Email |
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+tor-volunteer@freehaven.net</a> if you want to help out! |
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</div><!-- #main --> |
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</div> |
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@@ -100,7 +100,8 @@ href="mailto:weasel@debian.org">demand</a>. |
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</p> |
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<p><b>Other packages</b> are available for Gentoo Linux, NetBSD, |
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-and OpenBSD. If somebody sends me details for these I'll put them here. |
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+and OpenBSD. If somebody sends details for these to the Tor developers, we'll |
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+put them here. |
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</p> |
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@@ -123,7 +124,7 @@ href="http://archives.seul.org/or/announce/Dec-2004/msg00000.html">a |
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win32 installer, better |
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circuit building algorithms, bandwidth accounting and hibernation, |
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more efficient directory fetching, and support for a separate Tor GUI |
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-controller program (once somebody writes one for us)</a>. |
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+controller program (once somebody writes one)</a>. |
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</p> |
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<p class="date">2004-10-14</p> |
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<h2>Tor: An anonymous Internet communication system</h2> |
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<p> |
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-Tor is a toolset for a wide range of organizations and people who want |
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+Tor is a toolset for a wide range of organizations and people that want |
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to improve their safety and security on the Internet. Using Tor can help |
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you anonymize web browsing and publishing, instant messaging, IRC, SSH, |
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and more. Tor also provides a platform on which software developers can |
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-Your traffic is safer when you use Tor because communications |
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-are bounced around a distributed network of servers called <a |
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-href="howitworks.html">onion routers</a>—this makes it hard for |
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+Your traffic is safer when you use Tor, because communications |
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+are bounced around a distributed network of servers, called <a |
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+href="overview.html">onion routers</a>. Instead of taking a direct |
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+route from source to destination, data packets on the Tor network take a |
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+random pathway through several servers that cover your tracks so no observer |
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+at any single point can tell where the data came from or where it's going. |
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+This makes it hard for |
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recipients, observers, and even the onion routers themselves to figure |
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out who and where you are. Tor's technology aims to provide Internet |
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users with protection against "traffic analysis," a form of |
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@@ -77,7 +81,7 @@ confidential business activities and relationships, and state security. |
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<p> |
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Traffic analysis is used every day by companies, governments, and |
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-individuals who want to keep track of where people and organizations go |
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+individuals that want to keep track of where people and organizations go |
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and what they do on the Internet. Instead of looking at the content of |
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your communications, traffic analysis tracks where your data goes and |
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when, as well as how big it is. For example, |
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@@ -85,7 +89,7 @@ online advertising company Doubleclick uses traffic analysis to record |
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what web pages you've visited, and can build a profile of your interests |
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from that. A pharmaceutical company could use traffic analysis to monitor |
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when the research wing of a competitor visits its website, and track |
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-what pages or products the competitor is interested in. IBM hosts a |
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+what pages or products that interest the competitor. IBM hosts a |
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searchable patent index, and it could keep a list of every query your |
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company makes. A stalker could use traffic analysis to learn whether |
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you're in a certain Internet cafe. |
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