more clarifying work throughout
Roger Dingledine commited on 2013-09-21 11:33:11
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- <h2>What is Tor?</h2> <p>Tor is free software and an open network that helps |
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- you defend against a form of network surveillance that |
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+ <h2>What is Tor?</h2> <p>Tor is free software and an open |
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+ network that helps you defend against traffic analysis, |
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+ a form of network surveillance that |
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threatens personal freedom and privacy, confidential business |
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- activities and relationships, and state security known as <a |
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- href="<page about/overview>">traffic analysis</a>.<br> |
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+ activities and relationships, and state security.<br> |
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<span class="continue"><a href="<page about/overview>">Learn |
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more about Tor »</a></span></p> |
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connection from learning what sites you visit, and it prevents |
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the sites you visit from learning your physical location. |
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Tor works with many of your existing applications, including |
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- web browsers, instant messaging clients, remote login, and |
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+ web browsers, instant messaging clients, and |
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other applications based on the TCP protocol.<br><span |
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class="continue"><a href="<page getinvolved/volunteer>">Get involved |
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with Tor »</a></span></p> </div> |
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<a href="https://tails.boum.org/"><img |
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src="$(IMGROOT)/icon-Tails.jpg" alt="Tails Icon"></a> |
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<h3><a href="https://tails.boum.org/">Tails</a></h3> |
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- <p>Live CD/USB distribution preconfigured to use Tor safely.</p> |
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+ <p>Live CD/USB operating system preconfigured to use |
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+ Tor safely.</p> |
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<a href="http://www.atagar.com/arm/"><img |
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src="$(IMGROOT)/icon-Arm.jpg" alt="Arm Icon"></a> |
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<h3><a href="http://www.atagar.com/arm/">Arm</a></h3> |
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- <p>Terminal application for monitoring and configuring Tor.</p> |
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+ <p>Terminal (command line) application for monitoring |
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+ and configuring Tor.</p> |
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src="$(IMGROOT)/icon-Cloud.jpg" alt="Cloud Icon"></a> |
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<h3><a href="https://cloud.torproject.org">Tor cloud</a></h3> |
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<p>A user-friendly way of deploying bridges to help users |
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- access an uncensored Internet.</p> |
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+ access the uncensored Internet.</p> |
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