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@@ -36,29 +36,24 @@ built-in anonymity, safety, and privacy features.

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 <p>

-Your traffic is safer when you use Tor, because communications

-are bounced around a distributed network of servers, called

-<a href="<page overview>">onion routers</a>.

-Tor's technology aims to provide Internet users with protection against

-"traffic analysis," a form of network surveillance that threatens personal

+Tor defends against <a href="<page overview>">traffic analysis</a>,

+a form of network surveillance that threatens personal

 anonymity and privacy, confidential business activities and relationships,

 and state security.

-</p>

-

-<p>

-Instead of looking at the content of your communications, traffic analysis

-tracks where your data goes and when, as well as how much is sent.

-Tor aims to make traffic analysis more difficult by preventing websites,

-eavesdroppers, and even the onion routers themselves from tracing your

-communications online. This means Tor lets you decide whether to identify

-yourself when you communicate.

+Communications are bounced around a distributed network of servers called

+onion routers, <a

+href="http://wiki.noreply.org/noreply/TheOnionRouter/TorFAQ#WhatProtections">protecting you</a>

+from websites that build profiles of your interests,

+local eavesdroppers that read your data or learn what sites you visit,

+and even the onion routers themselves</a>.

 </p>

 <p>

 Tor's security is improved as its user base grows and as

 more people volunteer to run servers.  Please consider

 <a href="<page volunteer>">volunteering your time</a> or

-<a href="<cvssandbox>tor/doc/tor-doc-server.html">volunteering your bandwidth</a>.

+<a href="<cvssandbox>tor/doc/tor-doc-server.html">volunteering your

+bandwidth</a>.

 And remember that this is development code—it's not a good idea to rely

 on the current Tor network if you really need strong anonymity.

 </p>